Draft 2 of music video

Here is my Draft 2 :




In comparison to my first draft I have changed the chorus to just the image of the young girl doing sign language, the reason for this was because when I added in the braille section to the chorus  when getting feedback I was told that the sign language looked more effective and that also the braille was hard to make out, so instead I have chosen to remove this section not to confuse the audience. However as my theme is communication it now doesn't include different types of communication that disabelled people are able to use,  because I wanted my audience to understand  that just because you have a disability doesn't mean you are unable to communicate.

I have also included another scene of the girl on the computer,emphasis with my narrative of bullying and suicide. I chose to add that scene in again because it is obvious to the audience that the bully is the girl on the computer. Although at first i thought this would look well and link in, it doesn't. It is far too repetitive and just looks like I have run out of room so decided to add in the same clip twice. For my draft three I am planning on re adding the scenes I have cut and add them back in, but shorten the clips down so it doesn't over run.

You may have also noticed that the ending doesn't flow as well as my first draft, this is because I had to cut a longer clip out and replaced it with a shorter one so all the time framing is out of sync. In my third drat i am going to analyse this more and change it so it is more in time with the fading out, I found it gave more of an effect as when the music faded out so did the image, although in my second feedback from my second draft the audience liked that they were able to see what the messages the girl had been receiving which resorted in her suicide.